I am buying time with the gods, these are

my stomping grounds.
eeee, delightful!

Awesome!

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"i get butterflies"

I have been stumbling upon written works that confuse me up until the final blow. My initial reaction to this was wondering why so many wonderful phrases were being canonized but going nowhere.

Having no personal experience of the subject matter of this piece, it was refreshing to be able to get a glimpse of it, then to realize that the lifestyle is meant to be confusing. It doesn't make sense.

Now that I go back I can see the build-up, and it's quite brilliant. The problem I'm having now is noticing areas which could be more straight-forward (I've been doing this a lot today, but it's important). In the second line of the fourth stanza, is the phrase 'that of' really necessary? That's the sort of thing I'm talking about. Lose that sort of thing and you will have yourself a shining gem.

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'I am leaving, I am leaving. But the fighter still remains.'

ttthankyou

Thank you for the criticism.
I always love to hear it.

To be honest, this I don't have any experience with this, either. But I don't think anyone should limit themselves by experience, I think that's an important aspect which I like to explore and try to make something of.

ANYWAY,
thanks, I actually thought that line was really strange as well, but I wasn't sure how to fix it. I appreciate it and I'll look at it again!

thanks

Whoa, real strong. I'm still studying it. Really amusing.

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Oh, yeah, and I'm serious. Lucky bamboo is just a stick in a cup of dirt.

Pretty strange and interesting. Some nice imagery and the word choice is nothing short of good.

I personally disagree with the experience debate. You have to have experience to write something spectacular. A poem can't exist without experience; your audience will believe you more. My poetry for example, is all about me, if anyone wanted to know me better, I'd tell them to go read my poetry.

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^{Poetry is truly boundless. It is my passion, I am the canvas.
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my poetry, lemon
both bitter and tart
you decide the taste of my art}

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You don't have to worry about me assuming drug addiction. It was just nice to put myself into other shoes for awhile.

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'I am leaving, I am leaving. But the fighter still remains.'

Thanks.

I don't know. I think experience based poetry gets boring and lonely after a short time. Most of what I write somehow related to what I am going through, but that doesn't mean it's true and I can't understand. I always weave threads of myself in, but I don't like for people to know which is me and which is my neighbor and which is my mother. People experience in many different ways.

That aside, some of the greatest novels written are complete bullshit! In The Sound and the Fury, Faulkner wrote as a retarded man-- less believable? hell no. Life of Pi, the author was never trapped on a boat with a bengal tiger, I presume but it was still fantastic.

I think poetry/writing is about making things relatable, no matter WHAT. Poetry IS experience though words.